I really like how the Innocence is Bliss described their summer. All of the details about who they hung out with really stuck out in my mind. It made me look back on all of my summers and which one could possibly be my favorite and I will cherish forever. They described awkward and faces filled with acne during the middle school years. It made me realize how goofy we all were back then. I love the humor that they showed throughout the middle school years as well. "Colin asked me the wonderful question every dorky middle school kid longs to hear: "Will you go out with me?" That's a great example on how everyone truly was during those years.
Reminiscing through the past brought back memories of summers I've had and how much of an impact they made on me. This person did a great job of relating to the audience with great detail.
The mood would be giddy, humorous, and exciting. I wanted to know every detail about that relationship even though I probably should have already because I went to the same middle school. This essay made me think about everything and I really liked it.
Monday, January 24, 2011
Sunday, January 16, 2011
A Practiced Grace
This essay stuck out in my mind out of all three because the descriptive details and imagery it portrays. He is intensely watching this girl do her job and is so impressed my how stress-free and graceful that she is. He made me want to be there with him to watch this girl at Starbucks. It was like she was magical and rare. I love how he repeated "a practiced grace" a couple times throughout the essay.
He made this writing look so easy that anyone could do it, I wonder how long it actually took him to sit down and write this though. I know it would take me an extremely long time. He gave great detail about everything he talked about; and in thinking about the coffee shop, I don't think he left anything out. He seemed to describe everything, and everybody that was in the shop. He discussed what the two workers were wearing, and what every costumer looked like, it's as if I were there with him observing everything too.
I noticed that this essay was kind of like the first one that we did. It had thorough detail about the place we were in and the people that were in that place, but then there was talk about a specific person too. This essay did a great job of giving an example of this composition.
He made this writing look so easy that anyone could do it, I wonder how long it actually took him to sit down and write this though. I know it would take me an extremely long time. He gave great detail about everything he talked about; and in thinking about the coffee shop, I don't think he left anything out. He seemed to describe everything, and everybody that was in the shop. He discussed what the two workers were wearing, and what every costumer looked like, it's as if I were there with him observing everything too.
I noticed that this essay was kind of like the first one that we did. It had thorough detail about the place we were in and the people that were in that place, but then there was talk about a specific person too. This essay did a great job of giving an example of this composition.
Sunday, January 9, 2011
Nothing at Ground Zero
Berne's essay depicts the meaning of nothing...of emptiness. She discusses how the World Trade Center, something that is an icon to America, diminishes into nothing, so quickly, so suddenly. Nothing physically stands there, but upon looking at it, memories just float back. From observing the people, the leftovers of what used to be, she becomes overwhelmed with emotions, just like everyone else standing around her.
As she states, "An elderly man standing next to me had been staring fixedly across the street for some time...and said, 'I watched those towers being built. I saw this place when they weren't there." She has a way of showing the absence. Berne gives examples, gives her own experience, her own perspective of the devastation our country had that has turned into what looks to be...nothing. Nothing turns into absence, the lack of symbolism that used to stand so tall and proud.
People may have forgotten all of the emotions that swept over the country as time went on. However, the innocent victims, the families all remember clearly for they think about it everyday and every single emotion comes right back. On Berne's visit, especially while at the restaurant, some emotions come back to her, a complete stranger makes her recognize what she is feeling...sorrow. "Slowly they lined up, and it became clear that this was an honor guard, and that someone's remains were being carried up the ramp toward the open door of an ambulance." A pause...thoughts and feelings come back, everything that happened is now realistic right in front of her eyes as she sees a complete stranger being carried up, innocent as can be.
The points that stick out to me in this essay is how real she made it, it's as if she wanted the audience to be there with her. She really makes you think about September 11, 2001 all over again and brings back everything that America felt that day and months afterward. The most effective part of the essay is when she discusses the remains of a body being carried out of the pit, that really got to me.
As she states, "An elderly man standing next to me had been staring fixedly across the street for some time...and said, 'I watched those towers being built. I saw this place when they weren't there." She has a way of showing the absence. Berne gives examples, gives her own experience, her own perspective of the devastation our country had that has turned into what looks to be...nothing. Nothing turns into absence, the lack of symbolism that used to stand so tall and proud.
People may have forgotten all of the emotions that swept over the country as time went on. However, the innocent victims, the families all remember clearly for they think about it everyday and every single emotion comes right back. On Berne's visit, especially while at the restaurant, some emotions come back to her, a complete stranger makes her recognize what she is feeling...sorrow. "Slowly they lined up, and it became clear that this was an honor guard, and that someone's remains were being carried up the ramp toward the open door of an ambulance." A pause...thoughts and feelings come back, everything that happened is now realistic right in front of her eyes as she sees a complete stranger being carried up, innocent as can be.
The points that stick out to me in this essay is how real she made it, it's as if she wanted the audience to be there with her. She really makes you think about September 11, 2001 all over again and brings back everything that America felt that day and months afterward. The most effective part of the essay is when she discusses the remains of a body being carried out of the pit, that really got to me.
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